An empty space in the widest ocean
Separates families from each other.
Father left soon, became a refugee
But mother and children had to stay.
Of course they all want to get together
Like so many others in our world.
This empty space is now the eternal wait
They are hoping fate will change one day.
Like two ships sailing in different waters
Father and mother miss each other
Never being able to meet again
Always worried about their children’s pain.
Night falls slowly on that place,
Daylight comes to the other.
The leaving sun, the rising moon
Brief meeting now, the magic flow.
Could light and darkness ever mingle?
The inner need remains intense,
One ship wonders about the other
Whether she or he would miss this lover.
Their bond exists through time and space
There might be a wall or a sea
That always leads to separation.
This on-going bloody war
Has become the highest wall,
Two people living too far
Has become the widest sea.
Yet desire grows, it never dies.
The bond is there, what kind is it
Has it evolved, she-he wonders.
They touch each other in the great distance
Swift mental touch, thoughts and feelings
Intense emotion, moment of ecstasy.
The wind on the lake, the bird flies away
The moon rises, the sun goes down.
Day and night, sun and moon
Light and darkness, peace and war
Rich and poor, hope for both?
This brief encounter soon vanishes
Paper letters, classic phone calls
Skype or Facebook, email, Whatsapp
The instant fades, the magic flow.
© June 2016 Marta Pombo Sallés
This is a wonderful poem, Marta. I love it!
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Thank you so much, Teresa.
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Thank you, Teresa.
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Marta, tis your poetry
that has the “magic flow”.
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Wow, thank you so much
for this lovely compliment!
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Love this Marta!!!!!!
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Thank you, Bill.
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My pleasure….I thought it was brilliant! 🙂
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You have captured longing quite beautifully here, Marta. Thank you for this fine write.
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You are welcome, Tony.
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Beautiful writing ….. Unfortunately today’s reality
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beautiful write, Marta! The story it tells rises and falls with each emotion depicted so wonderfully!
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Thank you so much, Neha.
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I loved it.
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate this.
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I like this poem. I think if you just change a few lines it might be even more intense:
Father left soon, became a refugee
But mother and children had to stay.
An empty space in the widest ocean
This empty space is the eternal wait
Like two ships sailing in different waters
Father and mother miss each other
Never being able to meet again
Always worried
about their children’s pain.
Of course they all want to get together.
Like so many others in our world.
They are hoping fate will change one day
Night falls slowly on that place,
Daylight comes to the other.
The leaving sun, the rising moon
Brief meeting now,
the magic flow.
Could light and darkness ever mingle?
The inner need remains intense,
One ship wonders about the other
Their bond exists through space and time
There might be a wall or a sea
That always leads to separation.
Separates families, Would she or he
miss this lover?
Whether.
This on-going bloody war
Has become the highest wall,
Two people living too far
contemplate the widest sea.
Yet desire grows,
it never dies.
The bond is there,
what kind is it?
They touch each other
in the great distance
Swift mental touch, thoughts
and feeling tense, Intense emotion,
ecstasy of the moment
Has it evolved? She-he wonders.
The wind on the lake,
the bird flies away
The moon rises, the sun
goes
down.
Day and night,
sun and moon
Light and darkness,
peace and war
The rich
The poor,
Their hope
for both?
This brief encounter
soon
vanishes
Paper letters, classic calls
Skype or Facebook, email,
The instant fades,
Whatsapp?
the magic flow.
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Thank you so much for your careful reading and for bringing proposals of improvement. I will keep this and the other proposal. Thus there will be two new versions of the already edited poems. I would like to post both of them later on and mention your name as they will no longer be my poems, but mine plus your lovely collaboration. I could also include a link to your blog. Would that suit you?
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still definitely still your poem, but wouldn’t mind the link. All i did was move lines around.
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But it’s your collaboration and so you deserve at least mentioning you and your site.
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I wouldn’t mind being mentioned as an editor, not a collaborator. I’d just consider it a critique.
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OK.
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Such a moving poem, Marta! 🙂
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Thank you, Neha. So glad it has touched you.
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You’re welcome, Marta 🙂
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So very arresting in its deep sadness. But a sadness that life today ebcapsulates for so many. I feel it deeply. Thankyou for writing it
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You are welcome, and thank you for your thoughtful comment. I am glad this poem has reached you. Indeed, there is too much sadness for many people in today’s world. Yet we must not lose hope and keep fighting for things to get better.
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I like the idea of mixing magic and reality through the prism of emotion. The image of the ships enhances the sense of loneliness, but also speaks of hope. Love it!
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Thank you for this great comment. Very encouraging!
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My pleasure!
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
A GRIPPING STORY!
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Thank you!
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Yer welcome!
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It is a beautiful poem Marta. There is song in my regional language, Punjabi; which depicts this very poignantly. And my wife sang that during a TV interview. It always moves me to tears.
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Thank you, Ashok. So glad you liked this poem. I understand your feelings and tears. It is great that you are sharing all this with us, readers. So glad to have come across you on this platform. Stay strong and keep your wonderful posts!
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Likewise Marta. Am so glad to connect with you. Stay happy and blessed my friend
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Same to you! 🌈😇🌸
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Magical and poignant , pulling at my heartstrings as I read along.
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Thank you so much, Yassy. I am glad that you found this magical and poignant. Your comment means a lot to me!
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Always welcome, Marta. So happy to be reading such a beautiful piece of poetry.
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😃💞
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